Monday 15 February 2016

Brookes writing- The Sizzling Fly

The Sizzling Fly
There was a fly that was really annoying and everybody hated him in Clevedon. Everyone tried to hit him with a fly swat when he came over or tried to trap him but he was too smart. In Clevedon there was a new family that moved and in their old house it was full of flies, so they were use to flies but this one totally different and the new people wanted to move but there was not any house for sale. One day the new family had a plan to try and catch the fly, they were going to throw a barbecue for everyone that lived in Clevedon and try to sizzle the fly. They BBQ was held at their house, 3pm-7pm on Friday. Everyone thought that idea was great but the fly heard and didn’t end up coming. The family was furious because they spent heaps of money!!!! The next night the family was having leftovers from the BBQ and the fly turned up, the fly went to go and have a bite of the sausage but it was so hot and he touched the pan. BINGO, the family caught the fly!!! Everyone in Clevedon was so glad that the family didn’t move again. Everything went back to normal after that day and they all lived happily ever after...UNTIL… TO BE CONTINUED.

5 comments:

  1. I like that the story was basted on a fly a family and that it was a easy story to read

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  2. I liked the story it is amazing

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  3. Brooke that is a great story I looked how you used very detailed words.

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  4. The story was very cool the was quiet good the end was funny

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  5. it was very intresting and describive you need to work on adjectrives
    from Pixie and Abby

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