We think you have put you ideas into great words. We think you have sorted the paragraphs out really well. You need to try put more punctuation in it. Nina and Jaymee
Well done Abby you have done a great autobiography and you have very detailed paragraphs but my wish for you is too add a little more about your travelling.
Great autobiography Abby. You have added paragraphs and used capital letters for names and places. My wish is for you to add more detail to make it more interesting.
Like how you used lots of praghths. I like how you used a lot for detailed words in your story. Needs a little more information about your pre school and family. 👍Great job Abby.
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ReplyDeleteI was a fantastic story
ReplyDeleteAbby, did you find Tayla's feedback helpful?
DeleteTayla - next time you need to tell Abby two stars of things she has done well and a wish to work on
wish: you do need to include full stops at the end of every paragraph
ReplyDeletestar: you used a lot of describing words
star: we like how you put it into every little detail
from Zoe and Tayla
We think you have put you ideas into great words.
ReplyDeleteWe think you have sorted the paragraphs out really well.
You need to try put more punctuation in it.
Nina and Jaymee
Well done Abby you have done a great autobiography and you have very detailed paragraphs but my wish for you is too add a little more about your travelling.
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ReplyDelete⭐️ You have introduce your self
ReplyDelete⭐️ You have also done paragraphs
You could work on the spelling
I like that you have put it in paragraphs. I like that you used lots of life events. You need to put some full stops in the right places.
ReplyDeleteby James and Jordan
I like how your put lots of info of your like
ReplyDeleteAnd your ideas and main points
You need to get some spelling
you have used paragrafing and exiting words well.
ReplyDeleteyou need to work on your spelling
The story doesn't make sense.
ReplyDeleteYour spelling is good except for a couple of words.
You did good punctuation and paragraphs
I like how you had lots of praghths and lots of detailed words.
ReplyDeleteBit more information about your pre school and you family.
Over all it is amazing Abby.
you did well using paragraphs and you should use more punctuation.
ReplyDeleteGreat autobiography Abby. You have added paragraphs and used capital letters for names and places. My wish is for you to add more detail to make it more interesting.
ReplyDeleteA great piece of feedback here Brooke, I agree with you.
DeleteI thought it was really good I really i liked the part when you stayed in a five star hotel
ReplyDeleteIts great that you have responded as a reader Charlie, can you also give her two stars and a wish?
DeleteFor the wish more capital letter and full stops
ReplyDeleteStar you have got a good introduction
Star you have a lot of information
From Oscar and Ryder
I really like how you were very good at comers
ReplyDeleteYou need to work on full stops. By Kate
Can you give Abby two stars?
DeleteLike how you used lots of praghths.
ReplyDeleteI like how you used a lot for detailed words in your story.
Needs a little more information about your pre school and family.
👍Great job Abby.
I like the information that you used it was also good that you were very descriptive and specific.-mila
ReplyDeleteMy wish is for more full stops and punctuation
You put a lot of great ideas
ReplyDeleteYou had great lay out
You need to inprove on you spelling
From Tayla and ruby