Brookes Autobiography

The Story of My Life

My name is Brooke and I'm 10 years old. I lived Clevedon in New Zealand. I was born in Middlemore Hospital at 7:28pm on the 23rd December 2005. My daddy chose my name for me.

In my family I have my mum Jeb, my dad Warwick, my sister Meam and my brother Jarrod. My my is 39 and my dad is 49. My sister is 22 and my brother is 15. Well all live in Clevedon. I also have a cat called Lucky she is one year old and is a tortishell. I had a Doberman x Rottweiler called Tiny and she was 15 years old in doggy age. I now have two Saint Bernards called Whisky and Tequila.

I went to Clevedon kids kindergarten then I went to Get Set 4 School which is a pre-school. A few years after I attended Clevedon School. At Clevedon School I'm in a year 6 and I'm in room 4 with Miss Baker. My hobbies are hanging out my friends in the weekend or in the holidays. I also like to play soccer but I'm still learning and I enjoy swimming. But my favourite hobbie is to write made up stories.

I have 3 very important like events that happened. My first one is when I put my dog down in 2013 or 2014, it was a very sad moment because my mum told me when she picked me up from school. The first day of school was also my important event. I was so excited but when I got there I was scared. My last event was when I first travelled overseas and I went to Thailand, that where my mum's from. I was nearly 1 I think, and I loved it. Every year I now go to Thailand, it brings back very good and old memories.

Now you know about myself, Brooke. That was the story of my life. I will not be around forever but I hope to meet the people that read this story someday. 

Jaymee's writing

My new dog 

On the 3rd of march I am getting a 11 month year puppy called Coco. She was supposed to be a show dog but she has a undershock jows so nobody wants her,so we get her.Coco will wear a pink collar.She will have to learn what Brownie (cow) is and why we act around her.Coco is only a 11 months so she will be a handful.She is a Rottweiler.

Abby's writing

The laughing giraffe

Once a upon a time in donut city somewhere in the middle there was a Zoo and in that zoo there was many different animal but one stood out more than any other that one was Jerry, Jerry the giraffe Jerry had a sense of humor actually a big sense of humor anybody would say anything and you know it Jerry would laugh not just laugh his head of one day a little 4 year old went to the zoo and saw Jerry the laughing giraffe his name was Timmy. Timmy said something very very very very very very funny and Jerry the giraffe stood there just stood there Jerry the giraffe didn't laugh mr.green the zoo keeper thourght Jerry diden’t hear it so mr. Green told Timmy to say it again so that is exactly what's timmy did he said it and Jerry the giraffe still didn't laugh so the next day mr green took Jerry the Giraffe to the hospital for a check up brooke the doctor said there was nothing wrong with Jerry so mr.green toke Jerry back to the zoo from that day on jerry never laughed a month later mr.green was not happy that Jerry wasn't laughing so mr.green sat in Jerry cage with him and said why aren't you laughing is there something wrong Jerry said yes I just found out I have a brother mr green felt bad for Jerry so mr. Green said fine DONE!!!!!!!!! We are going on a hunt to find him so the next day Jerry and mr.green snuck out of the zoo really early and!!!!!!! To be continued

Abby's autobiography

Here is Abby's autobiography, can you give her some feedback?  Tell her 2 things she has done well (2 stars) and 1 thing she could work on

Story of my life

My name is Jessica. I am 10 years old. I was born on the 2nd of December 2005 9:10. I was 2 weeks late. I was born in England in a town called Salisbury.

My family are Mum Dawn,Dad Gary, Brother Tom, Sister Katy. Tom lives here and is 21 Katy lives in England and is 19. I have a dog called Smoke a horse called Charlie Brown ( he was born on the same day as me ) 5 chickens,8 fish, 6 sheep and 6 calves.

During my edication I went to Bourne valley nursery, Gomeldon primary and Clevedon primary.

I have had a coulple of extreme life events. When I was 4 I dislocated my elbow on my dads car hanging from the roof racks.. Also when I was 4 I got concussion because I banged my head on concrete when I slipped on a ball and fell backwards I went blind for a few hours. And on my forth day of school here I broke my wrist one the monkey bars. I was 8 years old when we moved here it was very sad and I knew barely anyone here.

Well that's my autobiography thank you for reading bye.

Brookes writing- The Sizzling Fly

The Sizzling Fly

There was a fly that was really annoying and everybody hated him in Clevedon. Everyone tried to hit him with a fly swat when he came over or tried to trap him but he was too smart. In Clevedon there was a new family that moved and in their old house it was full of flies, so they were use to flies but this one totally different and the new people wanted to move but there was not any house for sale. One day the new family had a plan to try and catch the fly, they were going to throw a barbecue for everyone that lived in Clevedon and try to sizzle the fly. They BBQ was held at their house, 3pm-7pm on Friday. Everyone thought that idea was great but the fly heard and didn’t end up coming. The family was furious because they spent heaps of money!!!! The next night the family was having leftovers from the BBQ and the fly turned up, the fly went to go and have a bite of the sausage but it was so hot and he touched the pan. BINGO, the family caught the fly!!! Everyone in Clevedon was so glad that the family didn’t move again. Everything went back to normal after that day and they all lived happily ever after...UNTIL… TO BE CONTINUED.

Story

Iron man 

Iron man was a great big metal machine. He went around people's farms eating all the machinery on their farms. The people realised that all their machinery was gone and they had had enough! They set a trap for Iron man. The men and women dug a deep hole in the ground and covered it up with branches and sticks. Then they put a truck on the branches and sticks. When iron man comes he will see the truck and go to get the truck and he will fall into the hole. Iron man doesn't fall into the hole. He reaches over the hole and grabs the truck and eats it right away.

The people called the army. The army got all the best men and women and missiles. The people did not know Iron man's powers and his powers are regeneration. So if he gets blown up all of his parts will come back to him. The people think Iron man is a bad alien but he is not bad. Iron man just wants to live a peaceful life.

Iron man comes from the planet of Ferrous. The planet is completely made of Iron and there is always plenty to eat and there are lava lakes. Iron man went to earth to find more iron even though they have enough iron already. Why would they need more Iron? Maybe they need iron for homes or they need iron to make more iron men and women and children? (Find out in iron man 2)

Charlie's writing - Dragon Slayer

Here is chapter 1 of Charlie's latest novel.  Can you give him some feedback? Try giving two stars (things he has done well) and one wish (thing he can work on).

Dragon slayer

Chapter one new land

Dustin jolted forward as his boat hit the shore of the new land, he jumped of and pulled out his constructio rifle, he looked around, the coast was clear. Dustin gave the signal, a ramp came down from the ship.The crew and a horse drawn wagon came down from it, when everything was down they moved through the bush ( most of the sailors were armed with two constructio bombs and a turbo shot gun they also had a small axe so they could cut through the bush).Dustin normally wears black and he always wears a mask in the shape of a skull, one of the eye holes has ex ray vision and the other has metal bars over it.

As they moved Dustin and the crew couldn't help noticing a howl that was dangerously close. Then out of the mist came a massive white wolf with paws as big as a human head. Then somehow it said what do you seek on our island? In a growly voice the crew were too stunned to talk but they didn't notice what Dustin noticed they were surrounded by the wolves. Then it said what do you seek? Does nobody understand me? then finally Dustin said yes

The all of a sudden it pounced onto Dustin and pinned him down the said said then answer me! we have come make a colony on this new land answered Dustin. Okay then you are so dead it said, how Dustin said back Dragons.

Kate's writing - Crystal Clear

Here is Kate's story called Crystal Clear. Can you give her some feedback? Try giving her two stars (things she has done well) and one wish (thing she can work on).

This story was once told that far away in a village called Rams vill there was a boy his name was jack.He was the new kid to the school so let's get to the main bet.Jack went in his new class and the lunch bell rang everyone went off he asked the teacher were to eat she said I will tack u to the cafeteria  so she did.She put him next to a boy called Billy”hi Jack said” and Billy replied” hi are u the new kid”he said “yes Billy “said ok .Jack said “can I be ur friend” Billy agreed and just then freed the school bully came past . Hay u yeah new kid come over here good luck Billy said in fear so jack went jack gasp to Billy is it safe just go Billy replied ok said jack feeling fritened as he tock his first step he shivered and he said yes freed said wate ur that guy that I . Just then I walk in freed I yelled don't be mean to the new kid freed said shore so I went up to the new boy hay are u all right  Jack ask Billy who is she he said wall people know her as the nicest girl at school so Jack said yes so I walk off as all the boys sterd! I went and sate at a an empty table all the boys keeped steering so I left the room and sate with the staff Billy and Jack went to look throw the window as the covasashon went on with the staff I said we have company Jack and Billy were scared as I ask them to join the staff so they went to join me  Jack ask why does Fred leason to you all the boys leason to me I said Billy asked why I said I don't no so I went out with Jack and Billy and I asked Fred to come he said ok I toke him outside I said Fred can u do me a faver anything he replied ok I said can u be the one to do the radish I was talk to cafeteria ladies and they need someone to tack there rabid he starting today so I will tall them todells so he went to the cafeteria and he had to were a rabish outfit .